Clopfic Review: The Benefits of Princesshood [Link]

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/86771/the-benefits-of-princesshood

All right! Wow, it’s been over a year since my last erotic literature review. I’ve decided to finally do another one because I’m on FimFiction now! Okay, that was originally for editing (and it still is), but I decided I should use it to keep track of clopfics.

I’m going to change the format of my reviews, starting with this one. Rather than doing a “play-by-play” sort of thing, I’ll give general comments, while highlighting some specific parts for detailed commentary (you know, like a normal review XD). Editorial comments will still be a “play-by-play,” but those will go on my editing blog. (I don’t have that for this story yet, but I’ll update. UPDATE: Editorial comments are up on Google Drive!)

(Review after the break.)

This particular story comes from an old mini-discussion about Ambris’s love for Twidash (futa Twi, to be specific). Thanks! (By the way, my personal recommendation for a non-alicorn-related futa Twilight x Dash clopfic is “Volume Seven”. It’s pretty quickly paced, though.)

All right, let’s get to the actual review. This premise of princesses getting endowed with male genitalia is, as you might expect one to say, rather strange. I really don’t find any reasoning behind it, and the story doesn’t really give any. But that’s the conflict, a central part of any a good story, so let’s go with it.

I’m not too impressed by the whole “Playfilly” thing. Sure, it’s an interesting explanation for how she knows what stallions’ anatomy looks like, but later it’s revealed that she’s been with one before. The fact that she has doesn’t really add anything to the story, in my view, so I think it would be better to just take that part out.

I absolutely loved the progression of the story. At first I wasn’t sure how things would go in terms of “heat,” but that concern was alleviated.

Honestly, I didn’t like the climax (both literary and sexual). Sure, it was “hot,” but it was just. Way. Too. Long. A lot of detail was put into the buildup, which is consistent with Twilight learning how to handle her new anatomy herself. But the cumshot descriptions seemed out of place, and right around the fourth shot I started wondering if it was put in just for the sex. The part after that was actually hot and consistent with the story. Maybe someone else should write the continuation. XD